[writing] This simile tastes like tapioca

So, I'm writing, and its all going good, got a nice spell-casted face off between my Bad Guy and my Heroes, and and then they head back to the Big City and get arrested, which is fine, needs to happen, and then the Queen holds court and then afterward, my main character, through whose eyes we see the story, gets put in a small room and has time to think.

Not a good thing.

When my characters have time to think about stuff, I inevitably simply insert Iteration Number (whatever) on How They Feel About Their Quest. Ohhhh, she feels so driven! So torn! So very Alone In The World.

Bleargh. I need some remedial Characterization classes. Show don't tell! I can't stop telling all about their Feelings. I have tell all over the place, it's disgusting.